1/28 reflection

Mr.Paterson showed us some of the essays which we made. One of the essays was mine. I was very lucky that I could hear the points which I have to improve. Naturally one was references. I have to write 4 more references to make my essay persuasive. My thesis sentence was not perfect. I only wrote 1 reason to support a thesis sentence so I have to add 2 reasons. I will be about an environmental problem. Probably references to these problems are necessary. Mr.paterson told me that subtitle has to be the same size as the title, but mine was smaller than the title so I altered subtitle too. I could alter some bad points thanks to Mr.paterson I think my essay is near to finish points so I think I have to start to think about presentation.

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